Introduction (Read before reading other posts)

This is a blog of a fictional, fantasy story I am still writing. The story is called "Garden of Finale", set in a modern time like ours (the name itself is pretty fantasy like, isn't it?). If you stumble across grammar mistakes or started to have some laugh at my limited vocabulary, please do not mind them! Its rather my first time writing a story, and do give some pointers and suggestions to improve the flow and the readability (is there such a word?) of the story. Cheers!